Review: Vigilantes

Vigilantes by Arthur Mayor
My rating: 4 of 5 stars

Again: dude. Use spellcheck. It's free with any tool you might reasonably use to write a book. And then check for homonym errors, because spellcheck won't catch those, and there are a lot of them. After that, look at your punctuation, especially capitalization.

But setting aside the many, many copy editing issues that kept throwing me out of the story, this isn't bad. There's an element of coincidence (people meeting out of costume who know each other in costume), but it increases rather than decreases the trouble the protagonist is in, so it's allowable under the Pixar Rules.

Ryan/Raven, the hapless protag, is trying to be a good, normal teenager, but the city won't let him; it keeps needing him to save it. And everyone is making moral compromises (including him, to a degree, mostly in who he's accepting help from), and it just keeps on getting worse.

There are a lot of superhero fights, maybe one or two too many, though they are well done.

Overall, these are good supers stories, but I really wish he'd get a better editor.

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